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13 September 2008 @ 03:58 pm
I'm asking for it leaving my computer unattended when my brother's around.

Ryuzaki nodded once and set the puzzle piece next to its brother on the nightstand.  Light craned his neck to look.  The two would fit together.

There was something reassuring about the way that puzzle pieces did that—the way they slotted right in with those around them, they way they belonged with the others.

He wondered briefly when the marmosets would come. They were crucial to his plan, and their loyalty had proved unwavering during the Cute Woodland Creatures War. But now, a new possibility worried him. Suppose that the marmosets didn’t like people with vaguely Japanese names? Once they realized his, would they turn on their former master with their tiny yet vicious fangs and claws? Ryuzaki hoped not. No power on Earth could match the ferocity of a fully-enraged marmoset, not even robo-Hitler on crack.

The marmosets arrived, marching through the doggie door with ephemeral grace. The lead marmoset, Captain Snuggle, stood at attention.

“We bring tidings of a new war, human,” he squeaked, “The likes of which even you cannot imagine.”

...yeah.  Funny, yes.  But it also just kind of hurts.

And now my mom's off again about how great a writer my brother is, how funny his writing is, and how much he always makes her want to read his work.

Feeling: depresseddepressed
Marmmarmaladefever on September 13th, 2008 11:23 pm (UTC)
Did he write the whole thing, or is part of it where you left off and he began?

Marmosets have "Marm" in their name! :D

You're an awesome writer, so do not be discouraged!
Vitamin Ctierfal on September 14th, 2008 07:34 am (UTC)
He wrote the part that started going on about marmoset wars. The two paragraphs about puzzle pieces are mine. XD

And they do! :O

Yayyy, thank you! ^^; That's one of the things that's been most lovely about fanfiction, is all the kind people encouraging me to keep doing what I do. x)
Marm: rammarmaladefever on September 14th, 2008 07:40 am (UTC)
I thought the puzzle piece part was yours. The other part was more... male-minded. lol

Marmalade the Marmoset... Nah.

The encouragement is a wonderful thing.
Vitamin Ctierfal on September 14th, 2008 07:50 am (UTC)
He did jump right to war and woodland creatures right after I tried to make an emotional belonging metaphor, didn't he? XD

I think Marmalade Fever is pretty darn solid. ;)

It is indeed. x)
Marmmarmaladefever on September 14th, 2008 06:05 pm (UTC)
Hmm... I don't think I'll be changing my screenname anytime soon. ;)
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Vitamin C: Ltierfal on September 14th, 2008 07:45 am (UTC)
I laughed a fair amount, in a slightly depressed sort of way. XD

I did take offense at the 'vaguely Japanese names' bit, 'cause (a) "Ryuzaki" (though I think technically it's "Ryuuzaki" in the full-on Japanese incarnation) is legitimate; and (b) even if it wasn't, it's not like I made that up. XD

Anyways... I know exactly what you mean -- my brother's always been the visual artist of the family, and it's like, why can't my mother leave writing to me? Why can't she appreciate that that's what I do, and that I like doing it, and why can't she support that? Why can't she see the merits of my marmoset-less prose? XD

*hug Jenny* I think we sibling-having people are doomed always to try to compare ourselves endlessly to our DNA-sharing counterparts. D:

Anyways... You're fantastic and lovely, and you never fail to make me feel better about my recurring lameness. XD
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Vitamin Ctierfal on September 14th, 2008 08:54 pm (UTC)
I daresay that's life for us. XD And of course, Jenny need not fear, because she is a FANTASMIC writer. :D

Haha, I definitely thought anything with main characters named "L" and "Light" must be the dumbest thing EVER before I actually got into it. XD
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Vitamin Ctierfal on September 15th, 2008 07:16 pm (UTC)
I definitely didn't notice that particular analogy. Whoaaaa. 8D

And the only other Wammy Kid we have in canon is Linda, so I dunno what their system is, if a system even exists. XD
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Vitamin Ctierfal on September 17th, 2008 01:28 am (UTC)
In the "Another Note" official fan novel, which I only just read yesterday, the implication seemed to be the whole thing went in order -- there was an A to replace L, then a B, and a C, and so on, and that they eventually got all the way to Z (Greek letters after that? No idea XD)... but I only count the parts that I like of that as canon, which is partly 'cause it's not the original creators and partly 'cause I'm just contrary like that. 8D

.../beleaguers you with unnecessary information XD
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Vitamin Ctierfal on September 17th, 2008 05:52 am (UTC)
It's pretty fun, though I think the dude got L a little bit wrong, and there are parts where I was like "NO SRS." Fun, though. And I have the cheapskate luxury of borrowing eltea's copy. XD

It is the best way. For shizzle. :P
Elteaeltea on September 14th, 2008 07:28 am (UTC)
Actually, I liked your part a lot better, and I’m not just saying that to reassure you. XD His was kind of disjointed and trying too hard to be funny and not succeeding. :/ I hope he never reads this. XD *hides* But srsly I laughed harder just at the “Disa-Neared” in your opening author’s note. ^_^

…and no offense to your mom, and now I RLY hope nobody but you and your LJ friends sees this, but didn’t you say she reads romance novels? XD You cannot trust the taste of someone who reads romance novels. Observe:

Real Excerpts From Real Romance Novels, Though Eltea First Attempted To Spell It In Google As “Expcerpts”

First, from “All About Passion”:

He caught her, steadied her—she would have fallen if he hadn’t closed his arms about her.

Even before she’d caught her breath, his hands had gentled, his rakish senses avidly relaying the fact that she was abundantly curvaceous, her flesh firm yet yielding, quintessentially feminine—for him, elementally challenging. His hands spread over her back, then his arms locked, but lightly, trapping her against him. Full breasts warmed his chest, soft hips his thighs.

A strangled “Oh!” escaped her.

She looked up.

The green feather in the scrap of a cap perched atop her glossy curls brushed his cheek. Gyles barely noticed.

Her eyes were green—a green more intense than the emerald of her gown. Wide and wondering, they were darkly and thickly lashed. Her skin was flawless ivory tinged a faint gold, her lips a dusky rose, delicately curved, the lower sensuously full. Her hair was pulled back and anchored across her crown, revealing a wide forehead and the delicate arch of black brows. Curls large and small tumbled down, framing a heart-shaped face that was irresistibly piquant and utterly intriguing; Gyles was seized by a need to know what she was thinking.

Those startled green eyes met his, roved his face, then, widening even more, returned to his.

“I’m sorry. I didn’t see you coming.”

He felt her voice more than heard it—felt it like a caress inside, an invitation purely physical. The sound itself was…smoky—a sultry sound that somehow clouded his senses.

His very willing senses. Like recognized like in the blink of an eye. Oh, yes, the beast inside him purred. His lips curved subtly although his thoughts were anything but.

Her gaze lowered, fastened on his lips, then she swallowed. Light color rose in her cheeks. Her heavy lids lowered, hiding her eyes. She eased back in his arms. “If you would release me, sir…”

…not much to say to that. XD If you want more… =D

From “The Lily and the Sword”: Grismwade was directly in her path, and Lily felt as if it had been meant that she come here. Her father was buried in this church, her mother beside him.

From “In My Wildest Dreams”: As soon as she caught her breath, Celeste looked up at Throckmorton and with all the passion of youthful fury, she said, “I won’t go. I won’t be polished, and independent, and a force to be reckoned with. You can’t make me.”

From “A Touch So Wicked”: The Demon Knight, the name Damian had justly earned for his relentless courage in battle, mounted his faithful steed, Cosmo, and returned to his barracks at the military outpost of Inverness.


Um, did I just spend about a million years insulting your mother’s taste in books? Oops. XP

Those seem ripe for annotation, though. =D

Vitamin C: Ltierfal on September 14th, 2008 07:31 am (UTC)
You are quite simply the most adorable thing ever to grace this forsaken Earth. :P

*tackleglomps you*

<3 <3 <3 <3

And no, that's part of the reason it makes me twitch -- because my mom loves reading that tripe but can't get through a paragraph of my stuff. XD I mean, REALLY? XD

Anyway, I love you. :P
Elteaeltea on September 14th, 2008 07:34 am (UTC)
YAY!!!! ^_^

Well, all I can say is… I don’t understand it. XD Remember that there are people who don’t like Shakespeare, either. ;) And I think you should relieve stress sometime by annotating those; there’s a whole site full of them. =D It’s the one I found when I was trying to write that Drabble Game thing with the different genres. XD

But yeah, also, I shall be online in a few minutes. :)

Vitamin Ctierfal on September 14th, 2008 07:36 am (UTC)
Yayayayayayayay to everything you just said. x)


Yeah. Four exclamation points. I went there. 8D
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Vitamin Ctierfal on September 14th, 2008 08:56 pm (UTC)
Haha, I know, right? XD

Never encountered Jean Auel, but it does amuse me what crap gets published sometimes. XD
Marm: DMHGmarmaladefever on September 14th, 2008 06:11 pm (UTC)
That first passage.... ROFL
Ngocorientalblossom on September 19th, 2008 12:14 pm (UTC)
bwahaha that's hilarious, mainly because we went to a zoo excursion at the start of the year for Human Biol, and half the girls were planning to inconspicously smuggle the marmosets out within the hour. ^^ And then, there were the lemurs...
Vitamin Ctierfal on September 21st, 2008 07:52 pm (UTC)
Ah, the siren song of cute and fuzzy animals. XD